第四次课后作业

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Showing Our Better Side

Yonghu Cui

As human beings, we tend to show our better side rather than show who we really are. This can be seen in many aspects of our life, such as appearance, work, and romantic relationships.

In daily life, we often spend ten minutes to an hour putting on makeup, getting dressed, or simply tidying ourselves up. We also edit our selfies before uploading them to social media to make ourselves look better.

In the workplace, we try to behave in a friendly and professional manner. Even when we are tired or dealing with someone we dislike, we still try to be polite because we believe it helps us leave a good impression on others.

In romantic relationships, new couples also present only their best sides at the beginning. Many weaknesses or imperfections take time to appear. This is why some couples choose to live together before marriage to see each other’s habits more clearly and decide whether they can accept them.

In conclusion, the tendency to show our better side in front of others is part of human nature. It is neither good nor bad. It simply helps people get along with each other.

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Showing Our Better Side
Yonghu Cui

As human beings, we tend to show our better side rather than show who we really are. This can be seen in many aspects of our life, such as appearance, work, and romantic relationships.

In daily life, we often spend ten minutes to an hour putting on makeup, getting dressed, or simply tidying ourselves up. We also edit our selfies before uploading them to social media to make ourselves look better.

In the workplace, we try to behave in a friendly and professional manner. Even when we are tired or dealing with someone we dislike, we still try to be polite because we believe it helps us leave a good impression on others.

In romantic relationships, new couples also present only their best sides at the beginning. Many weaknesses or imperfections take time to appear. This is why some couples choose to live together before marriage to see each other’s habits more clearly and decide whether they can accept them.

In conclusion, the tendency to show our better side in front of others is part of human nature. It is neither good nor bad. It simply helps people get along with each other.

勇虎同学的思路非常好，三个例子的选择得当，整体来说语言流畅，结构清晰，结尾升华特别好。

值得注意的有以下几点：
1. 原来的作业要求是写一个主题段落，一定要先看要求再构思和动笔哦
2. 语句表述中，还需要注意更加精确：比如show our better side和show who we really are放在一起对比不够精确：show our better side这好的一面还是我们自己真实的一部分对不对？而show who we really are对比的应该是假面，对不对？
3. in daily life这个地方你直接给了例子，这里可以考虑跟后面两点一样先给出总结
4. get dressed应该为get dressed up，否则意思就全变啦
5. 这是一个举例说明的段落，尝试使用我们学过的衔接词

Keep up the good work!

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非常感谢老师细心和耐心的点评。
这门课上到现在的感受是老师一直在授之以渔。即使抛去考试的因素，对于提高我的英语写作也有很大价值。