第五次课后作业

lhc7970

I broke my bad habit of eating salty and sweet foods after realizing that this habit was unhealthy. First, I began cooking at home as much as I could so that I could control the amount of salt and sugar in my meals. I gradually reduced the salt and completely stopped adding sugar, using different spices such as black pepper, star anise, and cinnamon to add flavor rather than relying heavily on salt. Then, when I had to eat outside, I asked restaurants to use only one-quarter of the usual salt and oil and to avoid adding sugar. If a restaurant could not fulfill my request, I chose not to go back. After that, I started checking food labels carefully and avoided packaged foods and snacks with high sodium or sugar. Finally, I replaced Coke and other sugary drinks with water, coffee, or tea. After a few weeks, my sense of taste changed, and I no longer wanted salty dishes and sweet drinks. As a result, I successfully broke this bad habit and improved my overall health.

Yonghu Cui

ekt1098517

I broke my bad habit of eating salty and sweet foods after realizing that this habit was unhealthy. First, I began cooking at home as much as I could so that I could control the amount of salt and sugar in my meals. I gradually reduced the salt and completely stopped adding sugar, using different spices such as black pepper, star anise, and cinnamon to add flavor rather than relying heavily on salt. Then, when I had to eat outside, I asked restaurants to use only one-quarter of the usual salt and oil and to avoid adding sugar. If a restaurant could not fulfill my request, I chose not to go back. After that, I started checking food labels carefully and avoided packaged foods and snacks with high sodium or sugar. Finally, I replaced Coke and other sugary drinks with water, coffee, or tea. After a few weeks, my sense of taste changed, and I no longer wanted salty dishes and sweet drinks. As a result, I successfully broke this bad habit and improved my overall health.

Yonghu Cui

勇虎同学，除了课堂上点评过的地方，还有几点供参考：

1. 这里After that是有明确的时间关系吗？考虑一下是不是next会更好一些？
2. 最后一句 I successfuuly broke this bad habit and improved my overall health，试试使用not only...but also句型
3. 全文的句型稍微有一点单调（大部分句子都是I did something开始的），试试改变一些句子的前半句（使用衔接短语或从句）。比如第一句，可改为 After realizing the health hazards of my high-sodium and high-sugar diet, I undertook a four-step process to break free.
再比如Finally, I replaced Coke and other sugary drinks with water, coffee, or tea. 可以试着改变一下主语，The final step was replacing ...
4. After a few weeks也可以写成Within weeks，这样改的话是不是感觉成就感出来了？

lhc7970

谢谢。不愧是老师啊。
这些建议对我很有价值。即使这么多问题，我还是借用字典反复改出来的版本。考试的时候不能用字典，生词、语法上还真有点担心。